搜搜考试网求检查下英语语法有无错误
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求检查下英语语法有无错误
Respected professors, good morning. I am very glad to be here for this interview.
My name is XXX, 23 years old. I come from Tianjin Binhai New Area. I have finished my undergraduate education in Tianjin Polytechnic University and major in Finance.
I am responsible, easy to adapt, compatible with my friends, and willing to help others. In spare time I like to watch movies, it can relax myself, even some movies can inspire people's will. And also I like communicating with friends, but most of the time, I'd love to listen to their experience, every time I feel that I can learn something.
Although I have broad interests in many aspects and grasp the essential knowledge of the major, but I think at present, I can do many things in a superficial level, but not be competent to do things professionally owing to lack of ample knowledge and ability. So I think further study is still urgent for me to realize self-value.
The major that I hope pursue for my further education is Insurance .because I find insurance is playing a more and more important role in our modern society. And nowadays in China, with the rapid economical development may provide a lot of chances to us.
OK, that's all. Thank you very much.
帮忙检查下语法 还有这么演讲是否合适 有没有什么需要改进的地方 求教
Respected professors, good morning. I am very glad to be here for this interview.
My name is XXX, 23 years old. I come from Tianjin Binhai New Area. I have finished my undergraduate education in Tianjin Polytechnic University and major in Finance.
I am responsible, easy to adapt, compatible with my friends, and willing to help others. In spare time I like to watch movies, it can relax myself, even some movies can inspire people's will. And also I like communicating with friends, but most of the time, I'd love to listen to their experience, every time I feel that I can learn something.
Although I have broad interests in many aspects and grasp the essential knowledge of the major, but I think at present, I can do many things in a superficial level, but not be competent to do things professionally owing to lack of ample knowledge and ability. So I think further study is still urgent for me to realize self-value.
The major that I hope pursue for my further education is Insurance .because I find insurance is playing a more and more important role in our modern society. And nowadays in China, with the rapid economical development may provide a lot of chances to us.
OK, that's all. Thank you very much.
帮忙检查下语法 还有这么演讲是否合适 有没有什么需要改进的地方 求教
嗯,文章写得事实性很强,也很质朴,但是若作为一篇演讲稿,则显得有些平庸,缺乏一些个人魅力...我不是专业评委,故不好说,也没有权利做过多的评论,如果仅仅当做一名普通听众来说,我想,第三段稍微改一下会更吸引我,可以简单地介绍一下自己的兴趣爱好,就如你文中所说：I like watching movies and communicating with friends--that's OK!在这之后,可以减去一些陈述性的评价和讨论,而改为讲述你的经历和故事——大家容易和演讲者所讲的生活经历产生共鸣.你可以说：I watched ---- a few days before,and I was really moved by----;I find that----,It was really an unforgetable experience.For this reason, here,I 'm glad to recomend it to you,and I promise you can gain something special in your heart as well.此后,介绍你喜爱交往时,也可以想办法更加亲近于听众,you can say:In my eyes, i see every friend of mine as someone I respect and learn from.Courage,confidence,kindness,and so on,I learnt from their words and their unique personality.I 'm hoping to get along with you and learn from you soon!等等,或许这些改动能让你和观众的交流增强!祝你成功!