关于修改一篇英语文章,包括语法,拼写,语句通顺与否,句子长短,就用改作文的态度改

关于修改一篇英语文章,包括语法,拼写,语句通顺与否,句子长短,就用改作文的态度改
具体文章如下
What does article tell you?
I think it mainly tell me about African how to use the Shanghai Expo to express their country .They told us the important role which Africa plays in environmental protection and coordination of world affairs,development of African countries,urban transformation,economic rise and cultural prosperity in Africa,the past and the future of Africa,impressed and inspired through display of all kinds of service programs,including transportation,buildings and facilities,schools,etc.
Who is the article for?
I think the article for those who want to know the general situation of African exhibition,including what they want to express and what they want to impact the audience.These people may be the tourist who interested; the researchers who want know more about Africa,the Government researchers who want to know more about the development of Africa,the designer who want to learn more about the style of African,etc.
How well does the writer understand his /her audience?
I think it belongs to an introducing essay.The length of an article is not long,but it put the main point what information are the audiences need .It used fewer words to let audiences know how is the Africa pavilion through the main design and interesting sight .In addition to this,writer also used the brief introduction the idea what Africa wants to express.As an introducing essay,it can let audience understand what you want to introduce quickly through a brief and distinct statements.I think it is successful.

What does THE article tell you?
I think it mainly TELLS me about how THE AFRICANS use the Shanghai Expo to express their country .They told us the important role which Africa PLAYED in THE environmental protection and IN THE coordination of world affairs,THE development of African countries,urban transformation,economic rise and THE cultural prosperity in Africa,the past and the future of Africa,impressed and inspired through THE display of all kinds of service programs,including transportation,buildings and facilities,schools,etc.
Who is the article for?
I think the article IS for those who want to know the general situation of African exhibition,including what they want to express and what they want to impact the audience.These people may be the TOURISTS who ARE interested; the researchers who want TO know more about Africa,the Government researchers who want to know more about the development of Africa,the DESIGNERS who want to learn more about the style of African,etc.
How well does the writer understand his /her audience?
I think it IS an introducing essay.The length of THE article is not long,but it put the main point IN THE information WHICH the audiences need .It used fewer words to let audiences know how is the Africa pavilion through the main design and interesting sight .In addition to this,writer also used the brief introduction the idea what Africa wants to express.As an introducing essay,it can let audience understand what you want to introduce quickly through a brief and distinct statements.I think it is successful.