谁能帮我检查一下这篇作文啊,有什么错误跟我说一下,
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谁能帮我检查一下这篇作文啊,有什么错误跟我说一下,
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文章中间,She has many fish and salad,too.请问你想表达的是Also,she likes fish and salad.
讲到学校规则那里有点唐突了,可以改成But In the school,she can't do anything.She has some school rules.
可以再加一个结尾:I like her very much.We are forever(永远的) friends.
语句很通顺,也没有拼写错误,但是不够出彩,可以学一些变化句型.如:She has short curly hair.And she has a round face--She has short curly hair with a round face.
如果是考场作文,大约扣1-2分,在我们这里.
再问: 非常感谢
讲到学校规则那里有点唐突了,可以改成But In the school,she can't do anything.She has some school rules.
可以再加一个结尾:I like her very much.We are forever(永远的) friends.
语句很通顺,也没有拼写错误,但是不够出彩,可以学一些变化句型.如:She has short curly hair.And she has a round face--She has short curly hair with a round face.
如果是考场作文,大约扣1-2分,在我们这里.
再问: 非常感谢