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请老师帮忙点评一下这篇作文
I like to think about "life in the future".
The environment will be much worse than it is now.I believe the tree will be less. There will be more and more people in the world,but the animals will be less. And I think there will be more buildings and more cars in any countries. The most important thing is there will be more wars,more people die in the wars. Huamn even will can't bresth or sleep.
Ihope we protect the earth.

我是一名初三的学生,因为快月考了,提前准备一下月考可能考到的作文题目.英语这一科的分数对我来说很重要,希望老师给这篇作文提一提意见,谢谢O(∩_∩)O~
请老师帮忙点评一下这篇作文
我喜欢去思考“生活在未来”.
环境会比现在更糟.我相信这棵树将会减少.将会有越来越多的人在世界上,但是这些动物将更少.而且我认为会有更多的建筑和汽车在任何国家.最重要的是将会有更多的战争,更多的人死于战争.Huamn甚至将不能bresth或睡眠.
我希望我们保护地球.

I like to think about "life in the future".
The environment will be worse than it is now. I believe that tree will reduce. There will be more and more people in the world, but these animals will be less. And I think there will be more construction and automotive in any country. The most important thing is there will be more war, more and more people died in the war. People even will not be able to sleep.
I hope we protect the earth.
我喜欢去思考“生活在未来”.
环境会比现在更糟糕.我相信那棵树将会减少.将会有越来越多的人在世界上,但是这些动物将更少.而且我认为会有更多的建筑和汽车在任何国家.最重要的是将会有更多的战争,越来越多的人死于这场战争.人甚至不能入睡.
我希望我们保护地球.


写的很好O(∩_∩)O~,但还是有不足,继续努力