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Question:Computers are widely used in education,and some people think teacher will not play an important role in the classroom.To what extent do you agree?
Nowadays,with the development of science and technology,the appearance of computer is of significant to the eduction,especially when compared with teachers.Therefore,I approve the view that the effects that computers have are more indispensable than teachers.
To begin with,computers are a better choice when the horizon of knowledge is taken into consideration.It is well-known by everyone that the content of a computer is extremely tremendous,you can find some information no matter what you want.For example,something about math,linguistic,geography,demographic and so on.But if the guide is only a human being,I don't think he can provide such prompt and large amount of knowledge.
Futhermore,computers can avoid the existence of some situations,such as the inevitablely unfair treatment that teacher do to students.It is no exaggeration to say that computers will judge and evaluate every student in the same standard.For one thing,it can make the relationship between students better.For another,it can stimulate students to compete with others .To some extent,maybe some days later,each of they will have a higher goal.
Adimittedly,there are still some positive influences that teacher have in the classroom.For instance,the teacher can use his voice,his eye contact with students or body language to make the class more vivid,in terms of the atmosphere.However,when considered about the horizon of knowledge and the same treatment that teacher can't do well to students,the role teacher plays in classroom may not be particularly critical.Hence,I hold that computers are doing well in the class.

整个都怪怪的,感觉句子是为了写复杂而复杂,理解起来很困难,语法也有很多问题.